xwacky
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Post by xwacky on May 14, 2009 17:25:04 GMT 1
Title: My Brother's Keeper (1/1) Pairing: Sam, Dean Rating: PG Warning: angst Word Count: ~1,700 words Disclaim: Nope, don't own them. The Winchester boys belong to Kripke, his writers, and CW. But if I do, surely I'd make Dean my personal... uhm, découpage? Summary: a little coda for 4.21 When the Levee Breaks... AN: This is my very first SPN fanfic. Some of you might know I'm a very novice writer. So be gentle. I never thought I'd even try to write in the SPN fandom. For one thing, it has plenty of amazing writers. For another, I don't think I can get Dean's witty sarcastic voice down pat. But in the spirit of anticipating tonight's season finale, and the emotional stress from last week's episode, I couldn't help myself last night. So here's my first attempt. Be warned it is not beta-ed. Comments are hugged, criticisms are appreciated! AN2: I'm having trouble to maintain the formatting with my browser (on Mac OX) when cut-and-paste. So instead of the laborious reformatting, I'll simply provide the link to my journal here: xwacky.livejournal.com/29705.htmlOT: This note is for Mick -- I don't know how else to post this so you'll see it for sure, but I went and saw Star Trek on Sunday. I *loved* it. If I remember correctly, there's only a brief making out scene between Kirk and a green girl. Well, Kirk was in his underwear, but nothing too serious I think.
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Post by Silwyna on May 15, 2009 18:09:44 GMT 1
It's very well written, great job I can't quite agree with Sam's thoughts in the beginning, I love him too much to think he'd think that way about Dean The formatting disappearing has nothing to do with your browser, it's simply gone whenever you copy anything in here. It's annoying, I know (I've posted my share of fic here *grin*), but I have no way to change that unfortunately. If you don't want to bother with formatting your fic again, then you can simply post it in the Fic Rec Category, we all post stories there that we think the others might like and who's to say you can't rec your own stories? This way you don't have to worry about the formatting
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Post by yor on May 16, 2009 2:16:02 GMT 1
formatting is annoying... I agree.
I'm so happy Silke said it... because I worship your work Jane, but I thought Sam was just a bit too over the top harsh as well in the beginning. I could see some anger, but it was just too much for me as well. Sam is too mixed up over this whole thing. I thoroughly enjoyed the rest though...
I demand more!
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Post by yor on May 16, 2009 2:17:37 GMT 1
lol... Mick will love it...
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xwacky
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Post by xwacky on May 16, 2009 20:34:34 GMT 1
Thank you Silke and yor! Your words means so much to me! I intentionally made the voice in Sam's head sounded overly harsh in the beginning to suggest Sam was not himself, it was some other evilness "occupied" his mind. I tried to avoid using words like "my brother" or "Dean" when Sam thought of him. Dean at that time was simply "the man" so that it was impersonal. By the time thoughts of Dean returned to Sam, that was when he withdrew his hands. I wrote it like this simply because I couldn't reconcile what Sam did. I won't believe for a minute Sam would consciously harm Dean. Thanks for the formatting-related suggestion!
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Post by moira4eku on May 17, 2009 13:30:54 GMT 1
I really enjoyed it! I thought you hit Sam right on the spot. In the ep, I saw such hatred coming out of Sam's face, and eyes while he was strangling Dean, that it made me cringe (I'm sure it was all that demon blood in him). But once he had time to think, he realized what he had done and wanted to make amends. Great job on your first fic!
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